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Oh man, I am exhausted. I almost fell asleep 3 times working on finishing up these slightly tweaked part 3 pages.

Nothing new really. I'm planning to add a few pages for the fight coming up. Nothing too much.
I don't know if I'll be updating with pages for part 4 this weekend. I'm slightly unhappy with the pace, and I'm trying to rework them.

Let's post the reworks and go to bed before I collapse at my desk.

Things most of you have seen before.


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Sep. 13th, 2008 09:17 am (UTC)
Yay! Update time! <3 I think the tweaks look great!
Sep. 13th, 2008 01:20 pm (UTC)
On page 181, I think "every detail must be perfect." *grins at the irony*

Gorgeous work, though. Have I ever mentioned my admiration for your ability to draw fifty bearded, middle-aged men and have them all look distinct and interesting? ♥
Sep. 13th, 2008 05:08 pm (UTC)
*agrees with tobu_ishi*

(I'd also, on the page after, say "damage" instead of "damages" -- "damages" tends to be used only in sentences where someone has to pay for damaged items.)

On p. 182... How interesting. I do wonder what the Firelord thinks of that rash pledge.

p. 183... Ack! For the first, time, a teeny possible art quibble! Yueh's eyes, in that lower-left panel, look... kind of missing, instead of implied as the other men's eyes are. To me. It could be me. I'm still a touch sick, apparently. So. Y'know.

*squees at the ice escape*
Sep. 14th, 2008 10:19 pm (UTC)
*also agrees* But if you want to keep "details" plural, you could always rewrite it as "All the details must be perfect."

Also, in the last panel of p. 182, I think it would sound less awkward if you wrote "Either alive or as a body."
Sep. 17th, 2008 05:01 pm (UTC)
Nice sequence - it looks great - some real cool shots - nice to see wavier capes - In theory, I already commented on this, but I don't remember this scene - so here's more suggestions-

p. 181 - replace pn. 2 with pn. 3 (not the text, mind) and vice versa

p. 185 - replace pn. 2 with pn. 3 (not the text, mind) and vice versa

pn. 5 - separate into 2 panels - zoom-in for pn. 6

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