Posting some more reworked pages for the Water Tribe AU. I'm starting to wonder if I should stop posting these here, especially since I am getting to a point where it's just some polishing (some new pages this time, for easier read).
Maybe I'll just upload them directly to DA, and keep the space on LJ for the final part 4 (which hopefully I'll continue soon- come on new episodes!!). It would confuse people less, instead of jumping back and forth between chapters.
Some polishing, some pages added, letting some panels breathe more. I will try and not redraw everything. But Lao wants me to prettify him!!
- Current Location:Burbank
- Current Mood:
morose
- Current Music:Radio-Canada news
Comments
Good luck on work! Are you working from home did you have to bring work home to finish it? And LOL on pretty Lao ^^
It was bringing work at home- we usually have to be at the studio, in case something happens and we're needed.
I enjoy seeing the reworks on LJ! But of course I'll accept whatever you find is more efficient for you (especially if that means more of ch 4 >:3 ...do it!!)
Ah, but dancing Zuko and Iroh are just perfect. Did make me smile! :D
Zhao: Powerhungry as always!
Yay democracy!
Zhao- always will be power hungry. That will not change.
Comments and suggestions -
Smooth flow on this sequence - all in one take almost -
96 - nice page design - is there missing a little mouth connector thingy on the word balloon? (On page 91, panel 2, there's a little word balloon glitch, btw)
97- Cool pirates - maybe put '...and enjoying it' in a separate box for a little dramatic pause effect to accentuate the humor.
98- Is fine, but I'd see more closeups instead of panel 2 to go with the text in boxes 2 & 3 -
100 - very nice page - I'd see a haughty looking close-up shot of Zhao looking down at the slaves between panels 4 & 5 (Panel 2, with the hand close-up, although it helps the flow, doesn't seem necessary to me - close-ups with hands are cool, but there are already two of them in the previous pages...)
Thanks for sharing - take care!
Skylark
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A powerful story with themes as old as time. Oh Zhao, your mother must have been exasperated with you as a child if this is how you behave. XD
Lovely update, Zhao is soooo deliciously callous!
Thanks for catching that- I'll correct it on the DA pages.
No Anime North, I'm afraid. I am indeed still stuck in California for work. I'll only be going out to visit family, friends and a few conventions. Hopefully, we'll cross paths along the way (a present? Awwwww! Thank you in advance!).
But every time I start to feel a *little* sympathy for Zhao...I remember this part and I want to sic Nauja on him! The B@$%@&D!!!!!!
What you can see on DA are the reworked pages, and I haven't had the time to rework anything past 100 yet.
But, if you want to see the first draft, part 3 can be found here:
http://pics.livejournal.com/rufftoon/gallery/0002yrhc
Note that page numbers have changed since the reworks. The story will be pretty much the same, a few added pages left and right for a better flow.
Part 4 has started, and pages can be found here.
http://pics.livejournal.com/rufftoon/gallery/00036sh2
Part 4 is on hold for now- gotta wait for the serie to end now.