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Oh yeah! More reworks.

Presenting...more Water Tribe Reworks!
(am I boring you yet?)
Nothing much else to mention, only that if you intend to go to NY comicon, check out the programming that will soon be posted online.

Much changes to the fight there, slightly longer, just for fun.
There's only a bit of rework to do with Iroh, a slight change of pace and dialogue, and I'm done with part 2! Wooot! Part three will have a few reworks, but not as many. A tweak here and there.

Apart from that...nuuuuh, too tired to write more.
Tried cooking some tilapia fish and succeeded! Yay! (yeah, I'm not much of a cook so every little new thing is a victory).


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Mar. 18th, 2008 06:17 am (UTC)
Your action scenes are amazing.

Typo on the third page you posted. Should be "YOUR" instead of "you" in the first panel. I love the last panel on that page, though. A strong Fire Nation = sideburns. Clearly.
Mar. 18th, 2008 06:22 am (UTC)
Dang typo! Thanks for catching it. It will be corrected for the DA posting.
Of course, sideburns ARE a sign of manly power!
Mar. 18th, 2008 07:06 am (UTC)
ooh nice, this is more thrilling than the last one. :D
sorry I haven't able to comment much lately...I've been so busy at work and all I could do I read your reworked pages. T__T
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:21 pm (UTC)
I do hope it works better (hurray for reworks!)
I know all about busy- don't worry about the commenting thing. If you have the time for a quick hello at the end of the whole thing, I'll be happy.
Mar. 18th, 2008 07:10 am (UTC)
Geezus, those action scenes... they just leap right off the page and slash me eyeballs!
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:18 pm (UTC)
Ewwwww, eyeball slashing with eyeball juices all over the places (why is my imagination so dark lately...)
(no subject) - k0r2n3h - Mar. 20th, 2008 08:31 pm (UTC) - Expand
(no subject) - rufftoon - Mar. 20th, 2008 08:37 pm (UTC) - Expand
Mar. 18th, 2008 08:15 am (UTC)
Muuuch better from your previous version. I always found your first draft to be rather abrupt and confusing as far as what the other officers connections were to this ninja. Now it's much more obvious, you have a better lead in on the ninja, and a better reveal of Zhao's reaction to the attack. Great job!
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:23 pm (UTC)
I think the first version was more abrupt because I wanted to keep moving forwards too fast. That, and the darn "edit edit edit" that I'm trying to learn properly. Funny how I end up adding rather than cutting away.
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Mar. 18th, 2008 03:28 pm (UTC)
Correction will be made and will show on the DA version.
Heh heh, Hahn at least was partly right- Choi did exist!
We would like to thank the Blue Spirit for letting us know that ninja like persons are possible in the Avatarverse. Yay!
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Mar. 18th, 2008 03:29 pm (UTC)
Ooooh, I'll have to try that!

For NYCC, I am subtly referring to both (how do you know about both?). But since there have been no proper announcements yet, I'm keeping mostly quiet.
Hosting? Naaaaah. But I've got a "guesting" offer for Friday.
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Mar. 18th, 2008 11:14 am (UTC)
The conclusion I can draw from this is: Zhao>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>Ninja.

I seriously love the sequence. :D
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:31 pm (UTC)
Depends on the ninja.
The Blue Spirit would kick Zhao's butt.
Mar. 18th, 2008 02:33 pm (UTC)
I am going to have to emulate you and redo comic pages if this is the awesome that results from it!
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:31 pm (UTC)
If you do, only rework them from the thumbnail form, not the finished if possible. Plus, if you have a better work ethic and actually write the whole darn thing down before hand, you may avoid most of that.
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Mar. 18th, 2008 03:32 pm (UTC)
Welcome aboard, be prepared to be a whole lot confused for a while as I keep jumping back and forth in this story.
Do ask questions if it does get too crazy.
Mar. 18th, 2008 02:59 pm (UTC)
I really love where this is going! It totally has my attention and wanting more xD

I also love the action. There is a good sense of motion and weight. I can almost feel the dude getting his face shoved on the ground x3 Awesome!
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:38 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much!
I sometime feel like my animation training gets a bit rusty- doing these pages is just wonderful practice for it all.
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Mar. 18th, 2008 03:37 pm (UTC)
The reworked pages can be found here:

I'm only a few pages away before the end of part 2, so I'm directing you straight away to part 3:
Some of these pages will also be reworked, but less than the two previous versions. Still, the story will be basically the same.
And lastly, part 4 which is in progress:
Mar. 18th, 2008 03:46 pm (UTC)
Interesting -- you changed the setting for the fight and all. Mmm, rooftop ninja.

Typo on p. 084: "you memory loss" should be "your memory loss."

Hee! Everything is better with ninjas! Though, Mr. No Self Control, you should not kill them before they can be made to talk. Tsk.

Congrats on the cooking!
Mar. 18th, 2008 06:22 pm (UTC)
Typo fixed on the DA version (silly sneaky typos)
Er...that's Zhao's problem when he's angry. He doesn't quite keep people alive long enough for questionning.
Mar. 18th, 2008 04:51 pm (UTC)
Mar. 18th, 2008 06:22 pm (UTC)
Mar. 18th, 2008 05:29 pm (UTC)
Suspicious!face on pg85 might be the cutest thing ever... ugh, and those action scenes ;__; How does he sense that the ninja is behind him? I humbly suggest maybe throwing an additional little shadow on his back that might have given him an inkling that something was descending from above? Unless the answer is that he's just so awesome that he KNOWS. I also love the choking and the subsequent elbow whack, awesome awesome fight scene! Haha, who cares if your edits add pages, they're definitely worth it!
Mar. 18th, 2008 06:25 pm (UTC)
I sometime mess up his face, other times, he obliges and let's himself be drawn properly. p.85 came up nice, but later...nuuuh. Not so much. But I won't go and tweak him forever!
Zhao felt a change in air pressure- that's what happens when there's a forecast of ninja dropping from above on you.

(ok, silly excuse)
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Mar. 20th, 2008 08:38 pm (UTC)
Holy crip, you're right! Totally forgot that arm. Will have to correct it, thanks for pointing it out.
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