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And that's why I'll never write prose.

Posting more Water Tribe pages- updating the fourth part in which Azula tells Zhao a bit of his past.
It was hard to write- trying to find the right words, the right tone to convey the right ideas. Gah! It was a struggle on just a few comic pages, imagine if I ever was forced to write a novel!
Never ever. Couldn't do it properly.
I admire people who can write prose.
If you have suggestions on how to tweak-edit some of these, your opinions more than welcome, as always.










42 pages for just part 4 already, way over 200 pages with the reworks.
Insane insane insane.
And I'm not done yet. Even more insane.
Though I have reached the bottleneck: now, I have to wait for the season 3 finale to air, or else things I want Azula to say, or how she would act-react wouldn't work (and it may give spoilery hints- not good! You readers are too smart!!).
So I'll be focusing on finishing reworks for part 2 (expect a few extra pages) and tweaking part 3.
It will also allow me some time to figure out how events will unfold for part 4: there's a bit of juggling back and forth I'll need to do.
I realised I'll need to introduce a new character- a Water Bender. His role will be little, but since he'll have a few lines, I started trying to figure out how he'd look like. Did some sketchies...
kug sketches

I can't wait for this story to be out of my system. After that, I can go back and focus on my own comics (until another insane idea hits me).

I'm off to get something to eat now!

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archangelbeth
Mar. 23rd, 2008 10:17 pm (UTC)
Ooooo, nifties!

p. 200: particularities should be "particulars" (don't ask me why; the second is the word used and the first isn't. O:> )

p. 201: "rose in ranks" should probably either be "rose in rank" or "rose in the the ranks" or "rose through the ranks."
(Good gracious, she almost looks... wistful? Sympathetic? O_O )

Ooo, the p. 203 expression on his face. She's offering him everything he's ever wanted...

And then "No." No spirits. Beautiful. He looks... pained, almost. Heeeeee.



Naujapic! Cool! (Pun not intended, but wallowed in after the fact.)

Kug looks... interesting.


...I don't suppose you have any clue when season 3 will be starting up again? *bigsadeyes*

rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:49 am (UTC)
Corrections made- I just need to change the files in the post now (a whole lot of juggling, believe me). Many thanks for the corrections!

No, no clues about season 3 I'm afraid. I do tend to follow the logic of some people on the internet, that calculated when episodes would air depending on when the third DVD will come out. But officially, I haven't heard anything. I am without clues like everyone. There should be news very soon though.
aidosaur
Mar. 24th, 2008 12:39 am (UTC)
Hahaha, I feel like I've been learning things about the end of the series from this to be honest. Like, ah, people who survive. I'll miss reading through part 4, but you're probably right. :D

Omigosh, is that Iroh in the background of the first page there? This installment was great, I love the flashbacks. <3

Hmm, it might just be me, but the last panel there on the last page seems a little strange to me. It's coming from such an odd spot, it looks like it's inferring a POV shot. U--unless that's intentional!

AND REAL LIFE NAUJA?? Oh wow, she's so pretty-- was her design based off the photo, or did you find it afterwards?

Awesome stuff, as always!!
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:54 am (UTC)
Aha! You shouldn't read too much into it- seeing as Zhao here is alive, and doesn't seem to be in the serie (or....IS HE?!?). I'm messing around with a lot of things, mwahaha!
Sharp eye- that would be Iroh. Have a cookie!
The last shot may appear a bit weird- I was playing around with a lot of angles, and that one kind of stuck. Hmmm...I may change it later on.
As for the photo, I may have seen it quite some time ago and subconsciously based Nauja off of it - when I saw it, she looked familiar. So I may have based myself on it while not quite remembering it (silly photographic memory that doesn't remember where some visual references are from).Found it as I was searching for Inuit names.
conga_chili
Mar. 24th, 2008 12:42 am (UTC)
Hahaha. We have an indigenous group called Kwakwaka'wakw here in North Vancouver Island.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:55 am (UTC)
Haha, awesome! It's just so much fun trying to pronounce it out loud XD
I end up sounding like Fozzie bear from the Muppet Show.

Edited at 2008-03-24 03:56 am (UTC)
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rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 07:19 am (UTC)
I am not even gonna try to...ok, no, I WILL try and twist my tongue doing it (so glad no roomates around to hear me try).
It amazes me how the archeologists managed to make sense of sound and names. I don't know much about central american civilisations, but even ancient egyptian is a bit of guess work how the words were pronouced.
tammylee
Mar. 24th, 2008 01:17 am (UTC)
*weeps from the awesome*
Zhao told Azula 'No.'!!
My dream has been fulfilled. I've wanted to see those two interact for so long and have Zhao deny her something! =DD

Insanity but entertaining insanity.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:57 am (UTC)
Zhao may never have told Azula "no", but she's just threated on forbidden territory there. Spirits territory.
ambrmerlinus
Mar. 24th, 2008 02:06 am (UTC)
Azula and Zhao are sooo creepy when they smile! (I love it!)
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:58 am (UTC)
I know! These two shouldn't be smiling. Ever.
Unless they are evil smiles. Then it's ok.
themadfish
Mar. 24th, 2008 02:32 am (UTC)
"No spirits." Such an awesome line. I think that's the first time you see that Zhao has actually changed.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:59 am (UTC)
Zhao's changes have been rather...minimal. But spirits business is not something he's willing to face again. Has he learned his lesson? Hmmm...
(Anonymous)
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:24 am (UTC)
Great!
I really enjoyed this last set of pages :nod: I love all the background info and the hint at what has happened between the last time we saw Azula (in the show at least)and now.

One thing that kinda iggled me was on the 3rd page, Azula looks waaay too kind and loving... It kinda looks like her eyebrows are going up in the middle in a kinda insecure way, which isn't very Azula-like. Normally she would smile all nice like that, but her eyebrows wouldn't move, giving her a more haughty expression... but that's just my opinion, feel free to ignore me completely.

-Draconissa (I don't have an account here, so I'm posting "anonymously")
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:06 am (UTC)
Re: Great!
Hello anonymous Draconissa! You will not get a note saying I've replied, but maybe you'll come and read back.
Azula may look a bit...kind there. But I assure you it is more of a sympathetic look. She's been through a lot herself in the past few years. She's capable of appearing kind when she wants to- but how much of it is genuine, we can highly doubt it.
amberguesa
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:15 am (UTC)
Ah, that shot on page 203 with Zhao sitting, enraptured by her speech, mouth slightly open in an unconscious smile as she draws fourth all his deeply ingrained hopes and ambitions... Loving how well you captured that reaction there.

I know my sister will be happy to hear about more work on your personal comic projects. I've been really enjoying the watertribe stuff, but since my sister is prejudiced against fan works, I've only been able to get her to read Horus. While I'd be surprised to see a new volume of Horus available when the next San Diego Comic con rolls around, I'll still be stopping by any booth you'd care to hang at to check out anything you've got going anyways ^_^
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:30 am (UTC)
Poor Zhao- so easily led by his ambitions sometimes. Azula still is good at pressing the right buttons (though obviously, not always the right ones).
The next Horus book is all planned out, and presently clocking in at about 64 pages. But there will be much reworks now (thank you Water Tribe practice!), and there will definitely be more pages.
Since Horus is all inked and everything, I highly doubt I can have that amount of pages ready for SDCC this year.
*sigh*
At least, after this exercise, I'll be even more ready to confront the Horus books! Yay!
I should be helping at the Flight booth again this year. I won't have much personal work done, but I'll be pimping Flight Explorer- which is coming out next week actually!
(there, book pimping done).
alexds1
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:54 am (UTC)
Zhao's line on pg 202 would read better as "I know my allies from those who want me dead." And that first panel on 204 is slaying me with awesome ;__; Love the effect the height difference made, and the suggestions of who is actually stronger than whom...
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 07:14 am (UTC)
That does sound way better. Hop, correcting- and will be posting the new version- thank yuuuuuu!
The top panel of 204 existed as a lone sketch quite a few months ago. I'm glad I finally was able to plug it in.
snapes_angel
Mar. 24th, 2008 05:30 am (UTC)
:thumbsup: It will be interesting to see the rest of Azula's reaction to his reply.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 07:15 am (UTC)
Ha ha, you mean is she going to give him a dose of blue fire? I think she wants very badly to do that...
snapes_angel
Mar. 24th, 2008 02:33 pm (UTC)
^_^
azvolrien
Mar. 24th, 2008 11:46 am (UTC)
It'd be interesting to see a massive Zhao-vs-Azula Firebending fight... But I dunno if that'd be in character for the new Zhao or not.

My live-action!Nauja is always going to be Marilyn from Northern Exposure.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:31 pm (UTC)
Well, at least Zhao can firebend again, so if need be...
Oh my, I think the character of Marilyn may have been another subconscious inspiration for the look of Nauja, ha ha!
beckychan
Mar. 24th, 2008 02:52 pm (UTC)
Having (finally!) caught up on everything, I must tell you how much I love this comic. Zhao isn't my favorite character to focus on, not by a long shot, but it's still an extremely good story to read.

I'm digging Nauja. She's such a fun character. ^_^
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:35 pm (UTC)
That is rather a whole lot of pages to wade through. Glad you've enjoyed the read so far.
I think it is easier to mess around with the Avatarverse by using some minor characters- and I don't know why, I've always had more fun with the adults of which the show has a great cast of.
beckychan
Mar. 24th, 2008 06:33 pm (UTC)
Oh, absolutely! One of the things I love so much about the show is that the main characters are kids, but the adults of the show are so engrossing and interesting.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 07:57 pm (UTC)
...and also, the adults are not stupid!
(well, most of them anyway). There is definitely fun interactions between the kids and the adults.
jkivela
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:39 pm (UTC)
I love the flash back with young Azula and prescar Zuko. That is awesome.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 03:49 pm (UTC)
Perhaps the only other time we got to see Zuko in this story- the boy needed some attention.
angelwingkitty
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:14 pm (UTC)
Great job! And LOL at least now you'll have a bit of a break to the new chapters as we wait for season 3 to end. Wonderful job as always!
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 05:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
Ha ha, hardly a break! There's reworks to be done, plus I may still work on new pages, just so I can make a big page dump when the finale airs (maybe, I don't know yet. I may just focus on the reworks).
queen_marshed
Mar. 24th, 2008 04:15 pm (UTC)
I love it how even when he seems so enthalled by the prospect of power, Zhao refuses when spirits get involved. I guess he has learnt his lesson!

And those camera angles slay me with their awesomeness.
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 05:05 pm (UTC)
Being with the tribe, Zhao has learned their belief. One of them is to respect the spirits. But the lure of power can be rather...tempting.
queen_marshed
Mar. 24th, 2008 06:27 pm (UTC)
...Especially when the offer's from Azula I say! Definately not for an advantage, but to save yourself from a reletively painful death! XD
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rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 08:09 pm (UTC)
Too bad Zhao had to forget that no one should say "no" to Azula...that's going to come back and bite him, that's for sure.
Kug was supposed to have only one small appearance- but sneaked his way in for another scene or two so I had to actually spend some time and figure him out.

As for AWS- hopefully you shouldn't have to wait for much longer to see new episodes. Logically, episodes should play before the third DVD is out in May. Then again, logic seems to fly out the window easily.
meryl_jed
Mar. 24th, 2008 07:30 pm (UTC)
For some reason I forgot Azula was on a platform and went...WAIT A MINUTE! SHE GOT HUGE!!! ..or Zhao shrunk in his age...XD ...go me.

Glad to know that out of all of this Zhao has learned at least ONE thing. Also, his "just kill him" line is so Zhao...but to me implies a bit of "leave me outta this". maybe? :D

Kug has the voice of James Hong in my head. XD
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 08:12 pm (UTC)
Ha ha, Azula had a sudden growth- she's now 9 feet tall!
(and that's my spoiler for season!! 3 XD)

Zhao is not completely won over by Azula- so he's acting rather dismissive ( which is more dangerous: angry spirits or pissed Azula?).
Interesting choice of voice for Kug...I can't quite say like who his voice sounds like in my head. Maybe with time.

Edited at 2008-03-24 08:13 pm (UTC)
meryl_jed
Mar. 25th, 2008 07:10 pm (UTC)
Spoilage WIN!

Probably chose James Hong simlpy cuz Kug's hat made me think of Chi Fu from Disney's Mulan. ...and I am a big Hong fan so more of him is always good.
dutchoven
Mar. 24th, 2008 09:57 pm (UTC)
Huh, Azula is on the run? From what? :O Or did I completely blank out on a section of the comic? hrrr....
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 11:00 pm (UTC)
Seeing as her brother is now the new Firelord, I'd say the sibling rivalry is reaching new levels.
There's actually a little bit coming up in the reworks of part 2 that will make it more clear that Azula is not welcome anymore (especially since she tends to stir trouble).
dryaunda
Mar. 24th, 2008 10:21 pm (UTC)
I can understand Azula being evil, but I hope her plans for the spirits don't involve anything environmentally -- and economically -- catastrophic, I expect better of her.

Just the same, she should really stay away from spirits, or Kiyoshi will eat her. (I'm sure you're familiar with the rumors of what Azula's been doing with Suki.)
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 11:04 pm (UTC)
She'll hint a bit about what she intends to do with the spirits(if she's not lying)... I can't say more at this point.

I've heard many many many rumours and speculations about Azula and her prisoner, Suki. Once again...I better not say anything except watch the show when it starts again.
shadowmullet
Mar. 24th, 2008 10:27 pm (UTC)
Awesome, you rock, roomie.
:)
rufftoon
Mar. 24th, 2008 11:23 pm (UTC)
Awww, thank you! *blushes*

(Anonymous)
Mar. 27th, 2008 03:14 pm (UTC)
I just caught up with the whole thing and am up to speed - not bored yet ;-) real cool stuff - the plot twists, the charactization, the writing, the storytelling, the drawing - all great-

If I may venture a few comments

p. 200 - panel 3 - I was a little thrown off that his head wasn't in proportion to the previous panel

panel 4 - nice shot

- In general - It's cool the variety you put into handling a fairly static scene - a small quibble is that I think the elevated position of Zula and the lowered position of Zhao (which is neat) could have been even more emphasized for dramatic effect (i.e some upshots of Azula) - and also maybe just a little more use of more extreme close-ups for dramatic effect - world domination oblige :-)

p. 202 - as an example for the previous comment - maybe panel 1 - could have had been an upshot - (or perhaps panel 1 of page 203)
panel 2 - great downshot
Panel 3 - nice shot - works well

Anyways, just real casual subjection opinions from a reader's point view.

Cheers,

Skylark

http://skylark-.blogspot.com/
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