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I couldn't resist

(Yah, I'm nuts)
Took a tiny, small break from the Water Tribe revisions, as I'm trying to rework the end of part 1 with an added twist.
So what did I do instead?

Just a prologue- having fun with past events. A very heavily edited version from the way I had first imagined it.

Not quite sure I like all the dialogs at the end, or the events. Ah well- first draft done!

Managed to see some YouTube videos of the Led Zeppelin concert that happened yesterday in the UK. The videos are down now, but my heart leaped with joy hearing "Kashmir" live.
I hope there's a cd of that show.
Better yet, a tour!!


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Dec. 13th, 2007 07:17 am (UTC)
Gosh darnit, Won-Shi-Tong is a freaking badass.

I love the way you draw the owldragonthing. I just, gosh. Would not like to see that chasing me through the bookshelves of my library.



Dec. 13th, 2007 07:27 am (UTC)
Have to admit, the dragon like form of Won Shi Tong is my absolute fave. Truly scary!
(I just imagined having it in my tiny room, keeping all my books safe...heehee, a bit cramped and all).
Won Shi Tong should hire Rex Libris as security librarian.
Dec. 13th, 2007 07:33 am (UTC)
Won Shi-Tong! :D Man, I love him. I love owls in general, and a badass library owl even more.

I'm even more intrigued about Zhao than before.

BTW, I have an mp3 of the Page/Plant live performance of "Kashmir" from, like, 1997? I think? If you want it I'll post it in my most recent LJ entry.
Dec. 13th, 2007 07:40 am (UTC)
Gotta love Won Shi-Tong (and his voice! Much love for his voice).

Ooooh, I AM tempted by that live performance you mentionned (I wonder if it's one from the messed up concerts they did a few years ago...hmmm...)
Post away if you can! :D
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Dec. 13th, 2007 07:49 am (UTC)
My god, it--it is NOT FAIR how good you are at drawing comics ♥ Panel compositions, backgrounds, ANGLES, I am in awe D: I can't do none'a that. I'm trying to do my own comics, which is why that stuff of all things was the first thing I noticed XDD

I've never commented to say how much I like this comic :D You are the reason I love Zhao as much as I do. Gah those first two pages where he's running are the best X)
Dec. 13th, 2007 07:57 am (UTC)
You are too kind- doing these pages are perfect practice. Doing comics is still an ongoing learning process.
Many thanks for taking the time to read these. Very appreciated.
Dec. 13th, 2007 08:32 am (UTC)
You know....I had no idea who Led Zep was for all my life til I reunited with one of my bestest friends....who's completely nuts for them.
Now suddenly I can identify songs by them just from sound of Jimmy Page's guitar playing.
My fav song by them is Achilles Last Stand...I think I'll go give it a listen now.

As for the new chapter...what a way to start out T-T I'm super scared of that owl dude...I'm looking behind me every other second in fear.
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:19 pm (UTC)
I used to have the Led Zep box set (the one with the cool crop circle on the cover)...I think I had to sell it a few years ago during a move. *sigh*
Haha, starting with a bang is more fun. And you shouldn't worry about big owls, unless you were nasty to books.
Dec. 13th, 2007 08:34 am (UTC)
Oh man, the way you rendered Wan Shi Tong's feathers is just, gorgeous. Love WST's dialog. :D
Dec. 13th, 2007 08:35 am (UTC)
I forgot to log on, sorry.
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Dec. 13th, 2007 08:46 am (UTC)
Won-shi-Tong love~ I'm wonderin what Zhao took from him...
Seriously awesome perspective!
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:23 pm (UTC)
Zhao took from him the scroll that told about the moon and ocean spirit- it also has a map telling the emplacement of the spirit oasis. This is what he used during his siege at the North Pole. Took a few years to get that plan off the ground.
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Dec. 13th, 2007 09:10 am (UTC)
Eeeeehehehehhehehe! ^^ This makes my day! I love this little glance into the past! Really pulls things together well! Great as always! I take it that's the scroll that tells him about the moon and ocean spirits and his reason for killing the moon spirit! :)
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:27 pm (UTC)
You are perfectly correct- it is that scroll that he took. Took him years to get organised for the invasion, but he held on to it.
Dec. 13th, 2007 11:05 am (UTC)
I always wished they had done more with this in the show! Imagining Zhao and the Fire Nation troops in the library is frightening vision. Won Shi-Tong's wrath must have been terrible.

I thought you did a great job with the illustration of The Librarian. His talons were especially menacing looking as he pinned Zhao down. The word bubble framing and font were nicely done as well.

And I loved how he let Zhao "escape" since he knew that he had already sealed his fate by his choice of what to steal.

(This really tickles me since I am now my son's school de facto librarian. :D lol!)
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:33 pm (UTC)
I know! I also wished they had done more, but a little glimpse of the past is better than nothing.
(Heck I sometime think I should have done more...but naaah! Moving on).
You're a librarian? Sweet. WHen I was young, I loved libraries so much I was actually thinking of making it career. Well, that went the way of the astronaut career too.
The call of the pencil was stronger.
Dec. 13th, 2007 12:41 pm (UTC)

No words. Too much awesome.
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:33 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :D
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Dec. 13th, 2007 12:53 pm (UTC)
Hey! That library episode is the only episode of Avatar which I've ever seen. It was good, but your prologue is better!

I'd been wondering for years what this Avatar series was like and a few months ago I bought one of the DVDs because it had an episode of a library in it. I saw the episode and I thought that it was way better than most animated TV series, but way below my notions of animation fun. It was much, too much formulaic. So, I never bothered to look at the other episodes on the DVD.

I suppose it goes to show that's it much easier for a single writer/artist to turn out a great little set of panels like this "prologue" than it is for a big team to consistently turn out great episodes in a big TV series.
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much for your very kind words.

It can be very very hard to keep a continuing strenght throughout a serie (plus, you also have to deal with TV standards and all that), be it animated or live action.
I hope you have at least watched the Blind Bandit episode, for it's pure fun factor. I do believe it is on the same DVD :D
(Zuko Alone is pretty good too, but it is better appreciated if you've seen past episodes).
Dec. 13th, 2007 02:16 pm (UTC)
It's owl stretching time! :D

Truly, that thing alarmed me severely. It's so sinuous and fluid and boneless and quick; the bit where it wriggled through the bookshelves after them inspired a few uneasy squirms in me.

I love how you've drawn this, though, especially the sheer exhaustive detail of the library itself. All that identical geometric drawing had to be boring as heck, but the final effect is stunning and expansive.

I'm also really jealous of your grasp of foreshortening and posing in the shots of Zhao trapped under the giant claw, especially the one looking up at Won Shi from behind Zhao's head when he's flat on the floor. That kind of thing is incredibly hard to map out and draw, and you did a beautiful job; not only does it satisfy aesthetically and thrill the adrenaline receptors, but everything matches up anatomically to boot.

Basically: Yay for you. ♥
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:40 pm (UTC)
It literally IS owl stretching time! I had the same feeling as you, as it snaked its between huge bookshelves.

Oh, I've been lazy with the library- I barely suggested books and scrolls on these shelves.

I don't know about the anatomically correct in that shot, but it helped loads that Zhao was partly covered by a giant owl foot.
Dec. 13th, 2007 03:10 pm (UTC)
oooo, intrigued! *happy dance* New story! W00t!
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:40 pm (UTC)
Continuation of the story- we're doing a little segue next :)
Dec. 13th, 2007 03:52 pm (UTC)
LOVE the panels and perspectives!
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:42 pm (UTC)
Thank you- after years of hiding from perspective, I'm finally trying to tackle it head on. I'm happy it's finally starting to sink in!
Dec. 13th, 2007 04:07 pm (UTC)
Nice layout of the comic heehee...

But I have a question, wasn't Zhao in an Earthbender army when he was inside Wan Shi Tong's library when he found information on the Moon Spirit? (As mentioned in the 17th or 18th episode of Season 1).

Sorry for the memory, I have this intense "problem" with details. >_>;

Dec. 13th, 2007 04:47 pm (UTC)
Zhao in an earthbender army? Naaaah. He was with a division of a fire nation army on mission in the Earth Kingdom, under general Shu. What they were doing in a desert we'd need to ask their war department about that order.
Your memory is pretty sharp to have remembered that.
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Dec. 13th, 2007 05:54 pm (UTC)
That's the thing with the serie- they throw you nuggets of stuff that happened, forcing us to make our own version of the big event.
Iroh has to be the one that has the most "I wanna know what happened!" moments.
I'm glad I found a reason to draw Won Shi Tong :D
I'd be curious to read-see other people's version of what happened when Zhao went to the library. If anyone saw anything, let me know.
I still do love Booter-Freaks rendition of how Zhao entered the library in the first place XD

Edited at 2007-12-13 05:56 pm (UTC)
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Dec. 13th, 2007 09:59 pm (UTC)
Aww, thank you! Very nice of you :)
One can be a ruthless general and still value books- duty over everything though.
Dec. 14th, 2007 12:04 am (UTC)
I love, love, love this. This is simply amazing. The first page certainly has a very epic feel to it... the grand shot of the architecture really draws you in. Then the owl looks terrifying. I love the values (errr... is that the right word for lights and darks? at least that's what I was told in high school, lol) on the owl page... they really add to the atmosphere. I like the smoke coming out of the tower in the last panel.

My quibbles/suggestions for your next draft would be a few of the word choices.

- I would change "fate" to "destiny," to better fit the show.
- I would change "palace" to "library" for the same reason. Even though it does look like the palace from Aladdin. : D

It might be effective to show the entire library above ground in the final panel? While Won Shi Tong did take the brunt of the library underground after Zhao came through, it might make a special visual impact on the Avatar fan to see the contrast between the library above ground (in this comic) and the library below ground (in the show). Maybe you could then add another panel after that, showing the library collapsing underground after the soldiers have left.

(Haha, that sounds like a lot of work. But that's how I'm picturing it in my head!)
Dec. 14th, 2007 12:42 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
- I was wondering if fate or destiny was a better word. I am even tempted to drop that bubble entirely. I'm not sure I like it.
-The word is actually "place", but I should change it to library just so that it is clearer.
I was actually wondering if I should show the library before and after (more work for me- must've felt lazy). These could be added between pages 5 and 6, and is definitely a good suggestion to keep in mind when it gets reworked-posted on DA later on. Thank you fo your input, very appreciated.
Dec. 14th, 2007 02:01 am (UTC)
I didn't think it was possible, but this impresses me even more than usual! The dramatic lighting, angles and composition are so cinematic and flawless! That first page has only simple gradients but looks so incredibly exciting! Your love for the scenery and characters (in other words, your Avatar love) cleary shows, and writing-wise it fits perfect as a prologue as wel. It's almost like the writers of the show gave you the perfect ingredients for the Water Tribe storyline, everything somehow fits!

I especially love page 1 and 2 as one of the most dramatic openings I've ever seen, 3 for the amazing action and dynamics. But my fav is the angles on page 4, those huge talons and tiny Zhao trying to escape, and maximazing the size difference. And the lighting on 5! You say the owl has little detail, but somehow your simple shading gives him real texture and he looks fantastic. The only nitpick is the scroll closeup on panel 3, perhaps showing some more of his hand? It wasn't as immediately clear as the rest of the prologue.

It's baffling! Applause!
Dec. 14th, 2007 02:41 am (UTC)
Thank you very much- *blushes*
Hehe, I am totally cannibalizing whatever scraps the writers threw our way. I agree with you with the scroll panel- I'll try and fix that for something better.
Dec. 14th, 2007 09:35 pm (UTC)
Um... can I ask you something?


I don't know if you worked on this scene or not, or know/remember the authorial intent, BUT, I'm curious: did Sokka try to draw a water tribe guy and a swampbender (with the "swooshy" representing bending, and the hat as a leaf hat)? Or is that supposed to be a water tribe warrior and an earthbender warrior?

*Feels silly for asking this question*
Dec. 14th, 2007 10:14 pm (UTC)
Didn't work on that scene, and I'm not certain of the original intent. My guess would be for a water tribe warrior with a war club, and an eath bender with a rock. But that's just my guess.
Dec. 17th, 2007 06:54 am (UTC)
Holy crap XD I knew I had forgotten to look at something important on LJ and thankfully found this post again...

LOVE that running scene, you make it look so beautiful and suspensful! And great buildup to that last page as well :3 The guy in charge looks like the guy from the episode where whatsisface and the other earthbenders were being held prisoner on that metal thing... I forget the name of the episode, whoops.

Oh man, also wondering what happened to the other soldiers... owl food maybe? XD
Dec. 17th, 2007 08:43 am (UTC)
Thank you very very much.
Well, I don't know about important...not "I know when the next comet is gonna hit earth" important...
(failing at humour. Too late for that. Need sleep)

Hey, now that you mention it, he DOES look a bit like that guy in the episode that I also forgot the title too and am too friggin' lazy to look it up right now 'cause I really should be in bed.

Other soldiers = owl kibblets. Bite size.

Edited at 2007-12-17 08:43 am (UTC)
Dec. 20th, 2007 10:24 am (UTC)
Ooooooooooooooh, that looks AWESOME!
Dec. 20th, 2007 03:52 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! :D
Jan. 5th, 2008 12:54 am (UTC)
Marian the librarian looks a little crabby!
Jan. 5th, 2008 03:28 am (UTC)
You mean a little owly...crabby owly...
(darn it, I can't place that reference! Stoopid tired brain!)
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